User blog comment:Ihaveawiixboxds/два/@comment-5772846-20141003205223

Good chapter. As I said in the last post, solid writing.

If you want suggestions/constructive criticism, I'd say to start with using more pronouns. Your combat paragraph was well written for being a combat paragraph, but it suffered a little due to just using "Ihawxd" and "Samed" to refer to your characters. It does help with clarity when both characters are 'he,' but mix it up a little: 'his opponent', 'he,' 'the other duelist,' etc make great alternatives.

Also, more description! :P I have the arena scene in my mind, but I don't know if it's open-air, how large the room is, how big the crowd is, etc.

Overall, good writing. :P Don't take my critique as Gospel truth. :P