User blog comment:Ireithien/The Walking Jed - Chapter 3/@comment-4845243-20140228005456/@comment-5772846-20140228035501


 * On the incomplete sentences, I actually wrote exactly what you gave as a combination example originally, but changed it, feeling it was choppy.


 * Idioms, casual writing, and all that jazz is mostly what I stick with when writing stories. Especially in one like this, it just seems to fit better.

Thanks for the suggestions!