User blog comment:Katuvis/LMBWFF Part 1/@comment-26929881-20140113223230

Not bad.

But some advice, I don't even pretend to be a spell expert, I'm not, and never will, but I think IMO that you should say "she" instend of "he" for you. Even though your a he now, you should still say "she thought" ect. Just my opinion.