Thread:Drew1200/@comment-5956750-20130905184412

Here's my conclusion on your essay. I'll judge it by using the 1-10 scale, one being worst and ten being best.

Writing Skill: 9.5. Very nice, I actually enjoyed reading it. Content: 9. Woah! 5,927 words! Very nice! Spelling: 8. Found about 10 typos. Bias: 2.5. Very biased. You didn't even mention the immense freedom that jailbreaking an iOS device gives you. It's at least as much freedom as Android, if not more.

Final Score

7.5

Work on that bias. 