Thread:Drew1200/@comment-5956750-20130905184412/@comment-4845243-20130908041430

Okay. I'll be rating it with one of my classes essay rubrics.

Thesis: 2/5 - I couldn't tell what sentence was the thesis statement, and none of the possibilities were strong.

Evidence/Research: 25/30 - Loss of five points for your inaccuracies.

Commentary/Analysis: 17/20 - I learned some things, and found the commentary pleasant.

Structure/Organization: 8/10 - Overall strong, but your conclusion was just a weak personal opinion.

Style/Language/Usage: 5/15 - This is where I have the most to gripe about. Your vocabulary was bald, and you used over 100 words banned in my class. I hate the word "very", btw.

Mechanics: 4/5 - One point lost for forgetting the needed hyphen in "high-end", "low-end", etc.

MLA Format: N/A

Total: 61/85 or 7.2 out of 10.