User blog comment:Ihaveawiixboxds/один/@comment-5780776-20141001202908

Better than I expected, Wii, and I wasn't expecting anything too shabby.

Mad is a tad OOC, but I understand that you probably needed him to fill that role so you couldn't really change it, so that can be accepted. Same with Ben, but it's alright.

I like the bit of description at the beginning, though you'd do well to add a bit more throughout the piece, but that's not really crucial to the story at this point, I suppose. And the dialogue's well done and quite amusing in points.

Not that I'm some proper critic or anything, but constructive criticism is always nice (usually) so I thought I'd give you some.

Overall, I am pleasantly surprised, and things certainly have become... interesting.